Some thoughts on a gift...
Perhaps my gift would be:
Knowledge
Love
Friendship
Kindness
Or maybe something tangible, I dont know, im still thinking things through.
To whom would recieve?
I would mainly like to give my gift to my family. Perhaps my mom, dad, brothers or sisters. Or perhaps there is a gift I could give to the whole word? Who knows.
Why? Lets see hear, I dont think I know of anybody who doesnt enjoy a nice gift from time to time.
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I like how you approached it by thinking of different possibilities, very smart.
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ReplyDeleteRight now all your thoughts are so indevered. Your all over the place. This is more a list you would make not a rough draft I hope next time you can find a niche.
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I like it. A different approach, but very clever. I like it.
ReplyDeleteNothing really stood out to me, just because it is a list like orangestyke says.
ReplyDeleteRight now, I don't really know what you were trying to do other than think of some ideas for your draft.
Some suggestion I might have is instead of making a list of gifts and saying that people enjoy them, actually think of a gift that really stands out to you and write about it.
This is only a rough draft so I know the final is going to be amazing. I did like how you addressed and chose the gifts to people. I don't erally enjoy the format though. It seems more like you were doing a fill in the blank type test and you just had to spit out your answers. I do like the gifts though but some comparisons, metaphors would be great. Maybe writing in a different format would be great. Possibly even a letter format. Those are always interesting.
ReplyDeletethis seems like you have a load of ideas on how your going to give and what your going to give.
ReplyDeletei think you should include all the topics you talked on, this would make the gift truly remarkable!
I see that your just trying to throw things out there, and it really stands out to me that most of the different ideas are dealing with relationships.
ReplyDeleteI think what your tring to do is just see the different options and possibilities are out there, and you'll decide later.
I think you have a good start, I just recommend narrowing it down.
I think this would be a good outline, but as a first draft, I don't think this would qualify. I had the same problem when I was writing my piece. I understand it is difficult to find a gift within yourself, tagible or not, and then give it to someone else.
ReplyDeleteMaybe for your next gift you can write about the gift of unconditional love you can give to your family, or helping out a friend in some way or another. Gifts like those, intangible, describes the type of person you are, but also the type of person you want to become. How would this gift change your life?
Andy Roddick
I think these are good ideas, gets you thinking about other more specific things.You could go more in depth with one of them and develop it from there. Think of instances where this gift was given to you, or you saw this gift given. Something like that. I think.
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